My Dad lifted me into a house that looked like a mansion made out of wood. Now I had energy which was good because I was going to swim with dolphins. I got my togs on and dived into the clear coral reef, I followed the dolphins.
The dolphins led me to an unusual, disintegrating sculpture, I fell and accidentally pulled a lever, the sculpture opened, inside it there were about a hundred sea snakes, one sea snake clutched onto me, then another and then another, soon all the sea snakes were clutched onto me and pulled me into the sculpture, the sculpture closed with me and all the sea snakes inside, my blood was drooling down me and the sea snakes kept hanging on. I was never to be seen again...
Wow Maia! This is a really cool story! Remember to keep it past tense or future tense. In some parts you said 'I fell and accidentally pulled a lever.' Instead you could say 'I fall, accidentally pulling a lever.' I like the descriptive words, disintegrating. What does disintegrating mean? Does it fit into the text? I love this story though! :)
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